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I agree with the above reviewer.
Also,you are indeed very brave.
I couldn't live with that,because I have Obsessive Compulsive Disorder and also Hypochondria(Fear of Bad health).It would freak me out.
Very brave.
Hey, Voxina!
First, let me say you are very brave. I know that doesn't help you, but I just wanted to say that. I'm sure a lot of people can relate to this, even those without Tourette's. I had a stress-related disorder that some wikipedia article related to Tourette's, but...
I'm rambling.
On with the review!
Considering you just told us in the former sentence that you do things your body forces you to, it seems obvious that you would perform those actions.
Feel is in the present tense. The past tense form would be felt.
Add an apostrophe: It should be it's.
Read what I bolded and see if you can tell what's wrong with this sentence. Your mom is a he? ^_^
Later, you keep using the word he, so I assume you meant your dad came in.
I noticed this problem several times:
Whenever someone new talks, you need to start a new paragraph.
For example:
"Hey," said John. "'Sup, John!" answered Bill.
should be...
"Hey," said John.
"'Sup, John!" answered Bill.
Understand?
Also:
The whole thing was basically one block paragraph. This can scare readers when they first look at it. Try to break it up a little.
This was very good, and other then a few nit-picks, it was grammatically perfect. Just remember that hint I told you about dialogue paragraphs.
Hope this helped,
~Sakura~